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<font size="5">七律 山村即事</font><font class="jammer">) u6 i2 w5 @6 i# x</font><br>
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<font size="5">山溪无渡墩石架，</font><br>
<span style="display:none">9 B9 G4 s6 e! M" E: k0 J4 e) Y( P5 C</span><font size="5">绕院竹篱坠苦瓜。</font><font class="jammer">& o9 P& h! V2 V i5 g( L, E</font><br>
<font size="5">试水嫩鸭啄绿叶，</font><br>
<span style="display:none">( Z& e8 o- z/ H; N7 a% \! N- f+ V</span><font size="5">出栏猪仔拱黄花。</font><br>
<span style="display:none">! ]6 e1 V# R0 G</span><font size="5">晒衣村妇搬新椅，</font><font class="jammer">. S- v3 u, Q+ e0 m [4 f9 v</font><br>
<font size="5">觅炭山翁煮旧茶。</font><font class="jammer">9 y' O7 l8 D( e: `& M8 S* ^</font><br>
<font size="5">轻吐汗烟思客至，</font><font class="jammer">- T9 H: d' ^3 S! d2 b+ L6 F- w3 B</font><br>
<font size="5">龙门犬卧护山家。</font><br>
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七律 山村即事<font class="jammer">+ d) ?& ~1 d9 N- c P) O, a</font><br>
山溪无渡墩石架，绕院竹篱坠苦瓜。试水嫩鸭啄绿叶，出栏猪仔拱黄花。<font class="jammer">! f2 P# n4 [! f# N, [4 ~</font><br>
晒衣村妇搬新椅，觅炭山翁煮旧茶。轻吐汗烟思客至，龙门犬卧护山家。<br>
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<span style="display:none">9 u. D. K, t: d</span>石--古仄；竹--古仄、坠---仄（俩仄夹一平）；试水嫩鸭啄绿叶--全仄；其余均好。</td></tr></tbody></table>
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<div class="quote"><blockquote><font size="2"><font color="#999999">浪石烟雨 发表于 2011-10-4 13:20</font> <img id="aimg_Ct2V2" onclick="zoom(this, this.src, 0, 0, 0)" class="zoom" file="static/image/common/back.gif" onmouseover="img_onmouseoverfunc(this)" lazyloadthumb="1" border="0" alt=""></font><br>
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山溪无渡墩石架，绕院竹篱坠苦瓜。试水嫩鸭啄绿叶，出栏猪仔拱黄花。<br>
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宜修改如下：<br>
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谢谢！<font class="jammer">9 T$ t4 v$ t, y# }( M</font><br>
我还是腹内诗书太少，用字难精，特别是对平仄还不是很清晰。</td></tr></tbody></table>
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