游梵净山（原创七律）

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<div align="center"><font face="宋体"><font style="font-size:14.0pt">游梵净山（原创七律）</font></font></div><div align="center"><font face="宋体"><font style="font-size:14.0pt"> </font></font></div><div align="center"><font face="宋体"><font style="font-size:14.0pt">武陵独得此奇峰，</font></font></div><div align="center"><font face="宋体"><font style="font-size:14.0pt">石级蜿蜒烟雾中。</font></font></div><div align="center"><font face="宋体"><font style="font-size:14.0pt">幽谷回声鸟语脆，</font></font></div><div align="center"><font face="宋体"><font style="font-size:14.0pt">清潭倒映杜鹃红。</font></font></div><div align="center"><font face="宋体"><font style="font-size:14.0pt">思过崖下思过远，</font></font></div><div align="center"><font face="宋体"><font style="font-size:14.0pt">梵净山中梵净空。</font></font></div><div align="center"><font face="宋体"><font style="font-size:14.0pt">金顶一望细浪涌，</font></font></div><div align="center"><font face="宋体"><font style="font-size:14.0pt">仰天长啸醉东风。</font></font></div><br>
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<font size="4">&nbsp; &nbsp; 休怪我冷月飞霜多事，才不致辜负了夕阳暖照写诗。“鸟语脆”三仄尾了，“思过崖下思过远，梵净山中梵净空。”出律失对，且与“清潭倒映杜鹃红”句失粘，成了折腰式。“金顶一望细浪涌”句孤平。不为律句。总的说来，不堪律诗也。望改之！</font></td></tr></tbody></table>


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