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发表于 2019-4-7 16:07:58 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式
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<span style="display:none">2 \0 _# G5 w$ }! R: V; O</span>敲灯又梦朝伊去,醒作相思句。东风乱笔惹香尘,缘是十月有情月月深!<font class="jammer">. \' N2 w( t$ v; H3 S&amp; r5 C&nbsp;&nbsp;F" Z</font><br>
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<table cellspacing="0" class="t_table" style="width:98%" bgcolor="#f0fff0"><tbody><tr><td><div align="center"><font size="6">虞美人</font></div><div align="left"><font size="4"><u>唐</u>教坊曲。《碧鸡漫志》卷四:“《脞说》称起于<u>项籍</u>‘虞兮’之歌。予谓后世以此命名可也,曲起于当时,非也。”又称:“旧曲三,其一属‘中吕调’,其一属‘中吕宫’,近世又转入‘黄钟宫’。”兹取两格,一为五十六字,上下片各两仄韵,两平韵。一为五十八字,上下片各两仄韵,三平韵。</font></div></td></tr><tr><td><font size="6">&nbsp; &nbsp;【格一】<font class="jammer">% [3 T0 x/ N1 f</font><br>
<font size="4">中平中仄平平仄(韵),中仄平平仄(韵)。<font class="jammer">5 d2 Q6 V6 p&amp; }/ I1 P; X9 A</font><br>
中平中仄仄平平(韵),中仄中平平仄仄平平(韵)。<font class="jammer">+ |0 g8 [" O) ~+ \5 l! G</font><br>
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中平中仄仄平平(韵),中仄中平平仄仄平平(韵)。</font><font class="jammer">, H; N% j9 w9 x2 [$ U&nbsp;&nbsp;d% N</font><br>
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<font size="4">仄平仄仄平平仄(韵),仄仄平平仄(韵)。<br>
<span style="display:none">4 f5 p1 {8 ^; f* K</span>仄平平仄仄平平(韵),仄平平仄仄平平(韵),仄平平(韵)。<font class="jammer">1 R6 m' t, X&amp; y+ I- r" Z6 J&amp; x</font><br>
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<span style="display:none">7 ]3 `* B1 _, p5 G7 y</span>仄平仄仄平平仄(韵),仄仄平平仄(韵)。<br>
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<span style="display:none">, u8 x# O&amp; O7 o&nbsp;&nbsp;q% k</span><font size="4">注释:"中"即可以是平韵,也可以是仄韵.</font><font class="jammer">, Y/ H* G+ {9 r3 e: L+ y* m" L</font><br>
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<div class="quote"><blockquote><font size="2"><font color="#999999">满城落叶 发表于 2016-1-19 12:41</font></font></blockquote></div><font class="jammer">4 q, a3 }. h" c1 z+ Q4 j9 B</font><br>
多谢{:1_7:}赐教,,,,一直不晓得“中”到底是平还是仄。。。。<br>
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<div class="quote"><blockquote><font size="2"><font color="#999999">阿打 发表于 2016-1-19 12:48</font></font><br>
<span style="display:none">, u: I: g2 x2 {</span>多谢赐教,,,,一直不晓得“中”到底是平还是仄。。。。</blockquote></div><font class="jammer">0 \6 I&amp; Y( q1 L( _* d</font><br>
中可平可仄<font class="jammer">' L% ^. J+ D0 M3 C' D&nbsp;&nbsp;N</font><br>
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要得<br>
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<div class="quote"><blockquote><font size="2"><font color="#999999">看见了就想说 发表于 2016-1-19 15:25</font></font><br>
<span style="display:none">, O$ q, g7 B, x</span>搞得好</blockquote></div><br>
<span style="display:none">, u1 h" K6 P4 r&nbsp;&nbsp;a9 P5 }6 r</span>缪赞,正在学习中{:1_12:}<br>
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<div class="quote"><blockquote><font size="2"><font color="#999999">渝秀星光 发表于 2016-1-19 16:46</font></font><font class="jammer">) w8 |; ]( [&amp; c- V$ C# f* v' X</font><br>
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初步学习中,门槛都还没摸到{:1_12:}<font class="jammer">7 b&amp; u' Y) Y. T% a' l% ?! o3 g</font><br>
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此调以李词、毛词为正体,而宋元词依李体填者尤多。若顾词二体,则惟唐人有之,皆变格也。 此词前后段四换韵,其两结系九字句,或两字微读,或四字微读,或六字微读,以蝉联不断为合格。 按苏轼词前段结句“便使尊前醉倒、且徘徊”,后段结句“对月逢花不饮、待何时”,“醉”字、“不”字俱仄声。又冯延巳词后结“尘掩玉筝弦柱、画堂空”,“尘”字平声,“玉”字仄声。谱内可平可仄据此,馀参张、冯二词。“热”、‘深“二字落韵,词中多处出律,还需仔细推敲。</td></tr></tbody></table>


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