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北风尽情地呼啸<br>
<span style="display:none">7 j/ `) p1 l& \' |</span>柳絮杨花慢舞飞飘<br>
<span style="display:none">& q& h+ {8 i- I- @* t! n</span>草木沉寂萧萧<br>
<span style="display:none">+ f! s3 {- B, M( Z- [</span>茫茫遍野封盖了厚厚白毛<br>
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装点得银素光耀<font class="jammer">2 X* V8 m$ A4 K" L- N6 S0 a7 H1 |</font><br>
山脉无语,江河无潮<font class="jammer">, L9 Y! V# O t# R0 \/ `</font><br>
广阔的大地如此寂寥<font class="jammer">8 c( |3 I; v; O& _% O6 X4 X2 s# x</font><br>
唯有饮烟在挑动筝弦<br>
<span style="display:none">' J7 [$ B4 w6 d: t7 h+ C& y/ k</span>唯有诗人在拨弄情调<br>
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<span style="display:none">8 A$ U3 `- A/ ]</span>再看那林间小道<br>
<span style="display:none">9 a% e$ z4 v. \( R</span>尘封了坎坷<br>
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尘封了污浊<br>
<span style="display:none">+ \, l# Q+ O& H: _3 H# k</span>呈现的只是一代天娇<br>
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<span style="display:none">& |$ A% m% {9 d) }% W/ W</span>在冬天的场景里<font class="jammer">9 w3 k. B0 ~- B2 p3 t( P</font><br>
你的妖娆<font class="jammer">; h( I }( r) U c0 A</font><br>
是万物和平的坐标<br>
<span style="display:none"># j d! H' o8 s+ p/ D6 b</span>你是和谐的种子<br>
<span style="display:none">6 B+ C! m# e! k i% l T$ D</span>和谐在梦里呐喊燃烧 <br>
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<span style="display:none">2 d4 l/ Q! N2 b8 W3 q |</span>在缤纷的四季里<font class="jammer">; w" C& Y1 v: R: E5 b</font><br>
你是青藏高原的白髫<br>
<span style="display:none">. }7 \" ~7 ?# u/ e4 P. ~) Y$ R</span>你是天山雪莲的诗骚<br>
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你是纳西族的保护神<font class="jammer">' y+ K" E1 H: G/ r' ^</font><br>
你是富士山的紧箍铁牢</td></tr></tbody></table>
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看了你好几首诗,说几句,个人愚见啊,不一定正确。<br>
<span style="display:none">" M4 f* O3 I; ^! c1 L/ i, D' R) {</span>我觉得你写的诗,过于直白,因此少了些诗意。有的也没有抓住实质性的东西,比如我们要写鸡蛋的“蛋黄”,通过描述“蛋清”来衬托“蛋黄”未尝不可,关键是要怎么让人家看完对“蛋清”的描述,而满眼看到的是“蛋黄”,让主体凸现出来呢?还有,我觉得不应该给某种物体下一个绝对的定性,比如“你是……”这样的句子的用得太多。如果诗是一个魔方,那就让读者自己去玩味,每个人,能玩出不同的图案……而让人能回味无穷。<br>
<span style="display:none">8 M6 P8 @0 G$ w, Z</span>个人拙见,当不得真,也许你是正确的,但我也坚持我的看法,嘿嘿</td></tr></tbody></table>
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朋友说得太好了,学习!受益非浅!</td></tr></tbody></table>
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<div class="quote"><blockquote><font size="2"><font color="#999999">宁谧青枫 发表于 2013-10-7 22:31</font></font><br>
<span style="display:none">) F# u% e P5 K3 p! ~# [</span>看了你好几首诗,说几句,个人愚见啊,不一定正确。<br>
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朋友说得太好了,学习!受益非浅!<br>
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唯有饮烟在挑动筝弦?应该是炊字打成饮字了,请作者改一改?还是我不太懂得文字的真实含义?</td></tr></tbody></table>
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